stop littering

WALT:we had to write a piece of persuasive writing and then someone had to
give me feed back.

Did you know that animals  are dying because of the world and because we
are littering. This really need to stop otherwise  we aren't going to have any
sea life left.

My first reason is because just imagine if you home got ruined because of
animals it is just not fair  well that is what it is like for sea life.

If everyone even picking up one bit of rubbish will make a difference.

Also in some places you can't even swim in the sea because you cant see the
bottom because it is covered in rubbish and pollution

According to the internet the rubbish and pollution takes 1000 years to break
up into little pits and then they seep down into the soil which eventually
reaching  the water supply.

Also rubbish that goes into the sea sometimes ends up on islands and
beaches  so not only is it destroying the sea life it is destroying us and our
beaches so what is the point in littering it gives us nothing but sham and lazy

According to the internet again  Over one million seabirds are killed by ocean
pollution each year.

The rubbish is also destroying the coral which  helps sea life coral.

So now you know when you litter you now where it goes maybe  people will
stop doing it because animals are dying because of us and it is not fer this
needs to stop.

Nia's feed back

Persuasive Writing Success Criteria

Introduction

• Opening question
• Opinion/Reason

3 Reasons

• Each paragraph is one idea supported with your reasons/facts

Conclusion

• This ties back/recaps back to the introduction

Highlight evidence of linking words.

Hi Neve i love how you started with a  question and told lots of facts it he
reasons maybe next time work on your opinion and some more liking words.

My reply Wow i don't know how much i used because in my writing maybe
i should use something else nested

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