Friday 3 August 2018
My Teasure
My treasure
WALT: use conjunctions to join words together
WALT: include descriptive detail
This task was very difficult because we had to use very descriptive words like the fanboys such as so nor for and but yet of
How I went in the WALT:
I did okay because i went back a lot of times to fix it up
How many FANBOYS can you find in my writing, the FANBOYS are:
F = For
A= And
N= Nor
B= But
O= Or
Y= Yet
S= So
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Kia ora Neve, its kaede. I really like your story about your grandma and granddad. I think you used a variety of descriptive language. Maybe next time you could check that your sentences makes sense. We did descriptive writing last term. Other than that good job :)
ReplyDeleteHi Neve, I have seen your blog post, I have been wondering, what was the ending after you wrote the word a? I do not know what you meant by "important in a? I was a bit confused.
ReplyDeleteWe found 2 ands, 2 buts, and 1 for in your blog post. I loved the way you described the sun as shiny.
from Royden
Hi Neve. It's Caitlyn here from T3. I really like how you have explained your treasure and what is it. The descriptive detail sounds very special to you because your Grandad was in the war, and that your Grandma was a nurse. That must be a little scary being in the war? What was your favourite thing about writing about your Grandma and your Grandad? Good Job Neve. From Caitlyn Totara 3. (:
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Neve, Its Cleo here from Totara 3
ReplyDeleteI really liked reading your presentation about your treasure it was very interesting. I liked how you did it on you Nana and Grandad being in the war. I like how you have used a range of descriptive language. Maybe next time you could add some pictures in of the medals. Would you have enjoyed being in the war?
Good Job!!